tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post3379894352895293965..comments2024-01-06T19:44:30.757+02:00Comments on Between My Lines: DividedAthinahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11485560779521386981noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-84293269081123768502013-11-19T16:42:35.049+02:002013-11-19T16:42:35.049+02:00Cool! Thank you!Cool! Thank you!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00324003852292176367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-11906444173686016262013-11-19T11:34:07.339+02:002013-11-19T11:34:07.339+02:00Thanks that would be great. When I edit we can tal...Thanks that would be great. When I edit we can talk again. <br /><br />I have also the first chapter of Divided if you like to read it. Here is the link <br /><br />http://between-my-lines.blogspot.gr/2013/07/divided-excerpt.html <br /><br />Thanks for stopping by! <br />Athinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11485560779521386981noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-18347941637510825372013-11-19T04:03:26.596+02:002013-11-19T04:03:26.596+02:00Sounds really great! I'd be open to peer revi...Sounds really great! I'd be open to peer reviewing if you'd like some fresh eyes on it - when/if you're ready, of course. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00324003852292176367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-66996777215422796502013-11-18T11:58:51.366+02:002013-11-18T11:58:51.366+02:00Thank you for reading this prologue. Yes, it needs...Thank you for reading this prologue. Yes, it needs polishing but I'm glad you find it promising. <br />I'm keeping your suggestions for editing. <br />Have a great week. Athinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11485560779521386981noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-28082360065861635332013-11-18T00:07:52.834+02:002013-11-18T00:07:52.834+02:00I really like the concept of two realities. Very i...I really like the concept of two realities. Very interesting and I think with a little polish it will be really really well done. <br /><br />I agree with some of the edits suggested above. A few more suggestions:<br />1. Forget "due to", maybe just "from"<br />2. Maybe drop "troubling and". Just weird works. <br /><br />Keep at it! Sounds great!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00324003852292176367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-39401083048928883192013-09-09T14:05:12.094+03:002013-09-09T14:05:12.094+03:00I'm glad you're not going to post the whol...I'm glad you're not going to post the whole thing here, even if I'd love to read it :) I'll just be patient ;) Have a great week Athina!Linda @ (un)Conventional Bookwormshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16627780985218960080noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-11226737976066646162013-09-09T11:37:45.434+03:002013-09-09T11:37:45.434+03:00Hi!:)
Thanks for reading the prologue and I'm ...Hi!:)<br />Thanks for reading the prologue and I'm so happy that you would read more. <br /><br />Yes, you're both right. I dismissed that idea. I have only uploaded the prologue and chapter one. <br /><br />Thanks again for reading it. Have a great week. <br />Athinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11485560779521386981noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-39303672323646008952013-09-09T11:33:03.339+03:002013-09-09T11:33:03.339+03:00Thanks for reading this. I appreciate it. :)Thanks for reading this. I appreciate it. :)Athinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11485560779521386981noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-41857346729917393362013-09-09T10:50:04.704+03:002013-09-09T10:50:04.704+03:00Athina, I love the premise of this! It's fresh...Athina, I love the premise of this! It's fresh and original, and just mysterious and scary enough to make for a great story! I would definitely want to read more :)<br /><br />I agree with Robyn, though, I would be careful to not post too much online... if you want to get it published, you should probably not share more than a few chapters just to see if readers are interested in the concept.<br /><br /><a href="http://unconventionalbookviews.com" rel="nofollow">Lexxie @ (un)Conventional Bookviews</a>Linda @ (un)Conventional Bookwormshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16627780985218960080noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-8737713263624377222013-08-31T09:21:57.069+03:002013-08-31T09:21:57.069+03:00This is amazing Athina. I like the idea of two wor...This is amazing Athina. I like the idea of two worlds and I will be very interested to see how this story continues. Thanks for sharing it.<br /><br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11174754110942238300noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-85920147910927117492013-07-22T12:23:47.836+03:002013-07-22T12:23:47.836+03:00Oh, I'm so glad you like this prologue!:D
Than...Oh, I'm so glad you like this prologue!:D<br />Thank you for reading. <br />I have started writing the sequel too, but I have only written 10.000 words. I must find time to finish it.<br /><br />Well the MC is a seventeen years old girl and she is in big troubles. :) <br />Athinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11485560779521386981noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-48928552407136841902013-07-19T22:39:50.734+03:002013-07-19T22:39:50.734+03:00That's a really interesting concept. Like I am...That's a really interesting concept. Like I am already forming questions in my head like is she in an Amish country? Old timey country? Can she talk to the people there? Or is she like a ghost? Do people recognize her? Or is she new to town? I definitely would keep reading after the prologue! Nice workJennahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16248676055912623718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-77849325572927647952013-06-03T15:44:55.629+03:002013-06-03T15:44:55.629+03:00Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. :D
Divided is c...Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. :D<br />Divided is completely different from Dazed in many ways. I can't compare them. <br />I like Dazed for the deaths too! It's not weird to me. hehe. But Divided had deaths too. What can I say...characters die all the time, right? :)<br />You're both maybe right that I have to leave it at the third time. <br />Thanks for stopping by and reading it.Athinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11485560779521386981noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-41993137466212044212013-06-03T15:29:53.003+03:002013-06-03T15:29:53.003+03:00Wow! I love this, Athina. The concept of living in...Wow! I love this, Athina. The concept of living in two worlds is amazing. And this suspense is killing too, making me want to know who more about the narrator. I agree with Robyn on stopping where the narrator realizes the third time it happened that it wasn't a dream. It'd make the reader want to read more. <br /><br />Good job. I'm still trying to decide which Prolouge I liked more. Dazed or Divided. I like Dazed for it's action and (for the deaths) Weird, right? And I like Divided for the supernatural element. :)<br /><br />Whatever decision you take, I look forward to more of this story. It has some prospects.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05328618234001371285noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-44958069616259898342013-06-03T13:43:01.510+03:002013-06-03T13:43:01.510+03:00:D I'm so happy you liked this! It's my fi...:D I'm so happy you liked this! It's my first rough draft and it needs editing, but I wanted a feedback. <br /><br />Yes, I could add more description when editing time comes, but first I have to finish with Dazed.<br /><br />I smiled wide when I read: "I was pulled in from the start with the first line."<br />(I corrected the phrase too.) <br /><br />Thanks for reading it. I really want to share my story out there.:)<br />Athinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11485560779521386981noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8903506778843918994.post-62865866199523393152013-06-03T02:07:56.459+03:002013-06-03T02:07:56.459+03:00I really like this, Athina! Two worlds is wonderfu...I really like this, Athina! Two worlds is wonderful. You have time and technology as the easy way for the reader to determine what world they're in. I am a fan of short prologues and I would suggest elaborating on the two worlds by giving us a little geography or a description of the lake at her grandma's or even the couch she woke up on and the same for the other (past) world. Also I would stop right at <br />The third time it happened I realized it wasn’t a dream. [I was] Living [in] two realities. The parts about her family, about how hard it was, all that could be told in the story. <br /><br />I was pulled in from the start with the first line. I'm not sure about sharing the chapters, but I do understand you wanting to get your story out there. I am backlogged on my books too. I guess you have to determine what you're looking to gain. If you think you can accomplish your goals by sharing a chapter at a time, then do it. <br />(just in case you're not aware because I did this all the time until I was corrected, its "all of a sudden" and not "all of the sudden.")<br />Whatever you choose, I look forward to more of this story!robgirlbookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03398614063792587098noreply@blogger.com